High Mage Serratus
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The Training of Fien'Dur((We will begin the training OOC. Please fill out this form;
Preferred lightsaber type:
Preferred lightsaber form:
Order you wish to join:
Alchemy or Necromancy:
Greatest personal flaw:))
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Fien'Dur
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Preferred lightsaber type: Double if multiple enemies, single if only one.
Preferred lightsaber form: Shii Cho
Order you wish to join: Expansionist
Alchemy or Necromancy:
Greatest personal flaw: The want of control.
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High Mage Serratus
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((Use parentheses (), [] or {} when conversing in an OOC manner. I asked for your preferred type of lightsaber, you have given me two. I asked for your order, you have given me a political party. I asked for your personal choice between alchemy and necromany, you gave me no answer.]
Correct these mistakes immediately so that we may continue with your training.))
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Fien'Dur
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I don't know what OOC stands for. I don't know the manner in which Alchemy or Necromancy is used. And what are the options for order?
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High Mage Serratus
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((OOC stands for Out-of-Character. It is the term for speech outside of an RP. As your training will be an RP, you must use OOC speech.
The choices of Order are the stealthy Inquisitorius, the monastic Church of the Dark Side, the mighty Sith Imperial Armed Forces, the elite Royal Guard and the mysterious Order of Sith Mages.
Alchemy is the creation and transformation of things using the Force, Necromancy is the resurrection of things using the Force.
I believe, as the first part of your training, it would be wise to read everything in the Required Reading forum and to read up on the announcements in each forum.))
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Fien'Dur
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Okay. I shall do it again and with everything filled out.
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Fien'Dur
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Preferred lightsaber type: Single blade
Preferred lightsaber form: Shii Cho
Order you wish to join: Stealthy Inquisitorius
Alchemy or Necromancy: Necromancy
Greatest personal flaw:)) Wants to much skill
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High Mage Serratus
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((Duly noted. Please begin by making a long, detailed RP post describing your feelings and first impressions upon arriving at the Sith Temple on Dxun, where I will be conducting much of your training.))
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Fien'Dur
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Fien finally arrived on Dxun for his training. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple. As he was walking towards all he could think was " I can't fail, I can't fail ". Fien was feeling excited to be training with his master for the first time, hoping that one day he could be as skilled as Serratus was. As Fien stepped forth into the temple to see his master Serratus standing there, looking impatient but content. " Sorry about the wait master ". " I was expecting you hours ago " as he turned and walked to the center of the room. " Let's begin your training ".
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High Mage Serratus
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((I asked for a long, detailed post. That was neither long nor detailed. Try again. And do not presume to control my character.))
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Fien'Dur
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{ Do you want any dialog in the post? }
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High Mage Serratus
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((You may speak if you so choose but do not presume to control how I respond.))
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Fien'Dur
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Fien arrived for his training on the planet Dxun. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple, and then around looking at the landscape noticing some sparring apprentices. As he was walking towards all he could think was "I can't fail". Fien was excited to be training with his master for the first time, hoping that one day he could be as skilled as Serratus was. As Fien stepped forth into the temple to see his master Serratus doing light saber forms and practicing. Fien stood and watched his master, trying to learn from him as he was practicing. He was in sync with the force with every movement of his body. He sensed Fien's presence as he walked in, and finally made eye contact. Serratus made a head nudging movement telling Fien to come closer. Fien, with an anticipated walk thinking "and it begins",met Serratus's eyes, they were looking through Fien as if he wasn't even there. The training had started then and there.
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High Mage Serratus
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((Once again, you have presumed to control my character, an action which is actually against the RPing rules of this forum. When I asked for a long post, I did not mean a block of text. Try using spacing. There is no detail to this post either, and very little about your thoughts and feelings. Try again.))
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Fien'Dur
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{ You're getting a laugh out of this aren't you? }
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High Mage Serratus
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((No, I'm getting frustrated with your inability to follow instructions. Do not comment on my teaching, just do as I say.))
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Fien'Dur
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Fien arrived for his training on the planet Dxun. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple, and then around looking at the landscape noticing some sparring apprentices. As he was walking towards, a cool rush of wind breezed by and cooled off the apprentice, making him feel invigorated. And all he could think was "I can't fail".
Fien was excited to be training with his master for the first time, hoping that one day he could be as skilled as Serratus was. As Fien stepped forth into the temple to see his master Serratus doing light saber forms and practicing. Fien stood and watched his master, trying to learn from him as he was practicing. He was in sync with the force with every movement of his body.
He sensed Fien's presence as he walked in, and finally made eye contact, a glance that pierced right through Fien."It's as if he knows everything about me with one look". Fien was chilled by the gaze that Serratus gave him and sat down to meditate until his master was ready for him to begin the training.
While in meditation Fien thought about his home world of Iridonia, and how his brother killed his family and nearby villages. "I thought i had killed him", rage flowed through Fien and he then realized how important his training was to him and his revenge.
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High Mage Serratus
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((Once again you have controlled my character and initiated your own training. I see I will have to give more specific instructions.
1) All you are to do is arrive at the Sith Temple.
2) You will not see me at all, doing anything.
3) Your entire post must be devoted to nothing but your arrival, your thoughts and feelings upon arriving and entering the Temple.
4) The post must be 500 words at the least.
This time I am also going to mark your post out of 100. For every incorrect use of spelling, grammar, punctuation, capitalisation, syntax and spacing, I am going to deduct one mark. There is a minimum mark you must earn or else you will have to try again. I am not, however, going to tell you what that mark is, nor will I tell you the mark you earn. Try again.))
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Mage Superior Odin
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Fien'Dur, as the very first task from me, I want you to write what Serratus asked you here last. I believe he has explained very clearly what you are supposed to do. Once you write this, we will move to real training or a mission. For now I want to test your roleplaying skills. You can edit your last response here, but exclude info about Serratus. What you can do to enlarge the post.
-You can express the weather
-You can express the temple entrance (think about a real life temple and narrate it)
- You can express how you look (body, clothes etc.)
- You can express the nature (trees, grass etc.)
- You can express your gestures
etc.
I just need one post with Serratus' standarts, then we will proceed to another topic.
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Fien'Dur
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Fien arrived for his training on the planet Dxun. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple, and then around looking at the landscape noticing some sparring apprentices. As he was walking towards, a cool rush of wind breezed by and cooled off the apprentice, making him feel invigorated. And all he could think was "I can't fail".
Fien was excited to be training with his master for the first time. Fien took a moment to observe his surroundings, a tip he learned from his old master when he was a boy. He was taught to be prepared for anything. Although Dxun was a jungle planet and there wasn't much to look at. Fien was determined to channel his force powers and get motivated. So he sat down in a cool, soft patch of grass. He used battle meditation and dark side energy was stirring within him.
After ten minutes of meditating Fien stood and looked up at the clouds, they were turning dark grey and the wind was fierce. A downpour of heavy rain fell before the jungle planet. Fien embraced the ferocious storms energy. Fien threw his hood over his head and began walking to the sith temple expecting his master to be waiting for him to start his training.
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Fien'Dur
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( Sorry, i forgot to do this. )
Preferred lightsaber type: Double-Bladed Lightsaber
Preferred lightsaber form: Double-Bladed Lightsaber Combat, Makashi.
Order you wish to join: Stealthy Inquisitorius
Alchemy or Necromancy: Necromancy
Greatest personal flaw: Wants to much power.
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Mage Superior Odin
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It was good, no need to test your roleplaying anymore. I believe you can have a duel right now
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Fien'Dur
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Thank you master.
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Fien'Dur
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Fien was inside his quarters, on the planet Iridonia, meditating upon the force, feeling it all around him. Fien kept thinking about the code of the sith as he did this. Peace is a lie. There is only passion. Through passion, I gain strength. Through strength, I gain power. Through power, I gain victory. Through victory, my chains are broken. The significance of the code had much meaning to Fien and he always followed that code with honor and respect.
Fien had finished meditating in his chamber and walked out the chamber door, and noticed his comlink flashing. Fien picked it up and answered, "Hello?"
Fien suited up in his clothes and grabbed all of his gear. His master, Odin, had given him a mission to pick up the new lightsaber crystal Fien had requested. After Fien and Odin had their duel, he needed to rebuild his lightsaber because Odin had sliced it in half. He had plans to meet up with Odin at a transport ship on Iridonia. Fien waited for the arrival of his master.
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Mage Superior Odin
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Fien was now in the very end of his apprentice days. Young Zabrak had already proved himself enough and now it was the time to have his very own saber with a crystal that would belong to him. He was going to make his way through the deep crystal caves while he was going to get challenged by the pure energy of Force.
Odin's personal cruiser, Osiris, was slowly hovering down on a landing pad of Main Academy Hangar, Sith Master had seen his apprentice already waiting for him. Suddenly all the pace going on in the giant hall had been stopped and focused on one ship. As a procedure for incoming Masters, the crew of hangar had positioned for a welcoming next to Osiris' main hatch as well some guards. While Elric stepped out alone, the crowd bowed down simultaneously. "Thank you, dismissed." Elric shouted just before everyone had turned their backs and returned to what they were doing. He slowly approached his apprentice, and put his hand on his shoulder.
"Are you ready?"
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Fien'Dur
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The arrival of master Odin made Fien excited, he was more than ready to be promoted and to have his own custom blade. Odin had stood in front of him asking if he was ready. "Yes, master, let's begin our journey to Dantooine." Fien said with anticipation, as he shook his masters hand.
The Zabrak apprentice and the Superior Mage, made their way to the main hanger transport ship Fien had reserved for their expedition. Fien boarded the ship with his master, and punched in the navigation keys. The ship seemed able, but it was definitely a used transport. The ship had supplies for one week, and emergency kits in case of injury or a dire situation. Fien sat at the controls and began to flip switches, in preparation of the ship. Fien had become a decent pilot in his days, but he most certainly was not the best, nor did he think he was the best. Fien looked over to the passenger seat and noticed Odin sitting there casually and calmly, as if he had done this kind of thing before. Fien wiped the sweat from his forehead before it rolled down his face, and started up the engines and took off toward Dantooine.
Fien arrived several hours later on Dantooine, and docked his ship in the hanger. Fien strolled out of the ramp from his ship and the fresh air, breezed passed his face, cooling him from the heat and exhaustion of the ride there. Odin looked refreshed as well, as he walked out behind Fien.
"Well master, here goes."
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Mage Superior Odin
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"My escort ends here" Sith master told while breathing the fresh air deep. "The gathering of a saber crsytal is an adventurous ritual and you have to do it all alone. You will find your very own crystal, the crystal will find you as well. When you first touch your crystal, you will witness how it will combine itself with your soul. Now go, when you come back with your crystal, we will construct your lightsaber"
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Fien'Dur
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Fien took in his master's words as he walked towards the clearing of the grassy plateau, taking long and powerful strides as he advanced forward. Fien knew of the crystal caves on Dantooine from scrolls and information from the archives, and read a lot of information about it before he arrived on the planet. Dantooine held creatures such as Kinrath, Dantari, and stalker lizards, although he wasn't sure he would encounter any on his travels.
Fien made his way through the Khoonda Plains with ease, but as he looked over the rest of field from on top of a hill, he realized it would be a little more difficult. Kinrath were all over the place down below, they were fast and unpredictable, making them dangerous opponents. Fien made his way down, thinking of a plan on how to take out the Kinrath one at a time, he didn't like the idea of an ambush. There was a small pack of smaller Kinrath to his right and about a kilometer away gave him enough time and space to do his job successfully.
Fien stalked up closer to his prey until they were mere meters away from him, before he unleashed upon them. Fien ran and jumped up simultaneously igniting his lightsaber and coming down on a baby Kinrath, and quickly struck the other small and startled Kinrath, killing them easily. Fien ran through the fields disposing of Kinrath as they walked around carefree, scavenging for food, completely unaware of what was happening around them. After thirty minutes of Kinrath hunting, Fien began his way to the entrance of the crystal cave, hoping to learn a lot from his mission.
Fien entered the cave with an anxious sense and called upon the force to lead him to the crystals. There were a few more Kinrath in the cave, but Fien could handle them with relative ease. Fien took the tunnel to his right, as the force pulled him in that direction. He walked with caution, the dark tunnels were difficult to see in. Fien used the damp rock walls to lead him through the tunnel, and to his crystal that called out to him through the force. Fien finally seen an illumination of brightly glowing rocks as he turned around a wall.
Fien strode up to a bright crystal formation that echoed with the powers of the force from when other people had been there as well, leaving an imprint in the area. Fien hoped that his power would be imprinted in the grounds, so that one day in the future, someone else could sense his presence there. Fien reached out to to touch the formation and as he made contact with it, he felt the crystal bond to his energies and his power, attaching itself to a part of Fien himself. Fien staggered back ripping a crystal from the formation, as he had this bond and force flow through him. Fien just simply sat there looking at the crystal in his palm, feeling the power flowing within it; his own power. Fien stood and looked around the rest of the room, noticing other formations of differently colored crystals. Fien took one crystal from each of the formations, hoping his master could tell him about each of the five crystals he had obtained.
As Fien began to exit, he looked at a small - what seemed like puddle- noticing a faint shimmer of a darkly colored object in the water. Fien walked toward it, and stood over it, assuming that it was a color crystal of some sorts. He reached in, but realized that it was deeper than he had expected it to be. He dipped his feet inside the water, trying to determine the depth of the waterhole. He had guessed about one and a half meters in depth. He stood in and his feet touched the glowing crystal with his feet, and dove under to retrieve it. It was a disfigured formation, maybe because it was under water, and the crystal emitted a black glow. He grabbed onto it trying to pull it free, but as Fien made contact with the crystal, he was warped into a different location, and possibly even a different time.
It had teleported Fien to what he knew to be the planet of Ziost. It was a cold and snowy location, with dark clouds that were unsettling and eerie. It was an arid and cold region Fien wasn't familiar with, other than reading something about it in the archives one day. He noticed a figure in front of him in a blur. Fien looked up into face of a long since forgotten sith lord known as Ajunta Pall, though his eyes were profound and full of evil. His face was different than Fien had seen on walls and statues. Much younger, however already holding the shades of hatred in his eyes. The vision of the great Sith Lord was getting more clearer as the young apprentice was approaching him. Nearly at the same age that Fien’dur was. Rather than a mighty Lord, that boy was supposed to be an apprentice, just like Fien. Now they were both staring on a starry stone on an altar in the middle of nowhere. Young Ajunta Pall had given Fien a black look and shouted. “It is mine, Krell!”. Fien’dur’s pupils had flourished with amazement as well as a great fear. Remembering teachings of old Sith Lords, Krell was Ajunta Pall’s brother, whom he killed while they were on an apprentice mission on Ziost. The reality of this was almost dream like, and Fien was defenseless, other than hand-to-hand combat and his force abilities and knowing even this was a vision, the mind twisting reality and the fore-known aftermath of Sith Lord’s brother was disturbing. Ajunta Pall withdrew his lightsaber and struck at the Zabrak, Fien rolled sideways and force pushed the ancient sith away. Fien didn't seem to do much to the figure, but as long as he had some distance, he might make it out of this alive. Ajunta Pall casted force lightning, a powerful arch of purple lightning from his fingertips. Fien ran away from the lightning and jumped up on top of a mound and jumped on top of the sith lord from the mound, making him fall to his feet. Fien Force screamed right into the ears of Ajunta Pall, while still on his back. Ajunta threw Fien back with immense force causing him to crash into a wall of frozen dirt next to altar. Ajunta Pall sauntered over to the Zabrak as he lay there in pain, and reached out his hand to pick up the stone. “You are pathetic, brother” the dark lord spoke with a deep voice, and a giggle of rage as he held and raised the crystal in his hand. Fien’s hands were digging the dense snow desperately to find something he might use as a weapon. “Survival of the fittest, the only rule of the nature.” Dark Lord had kept on smirking while he was pointing his lightsaber just few inches above of his brother’s eyes. “And now... it’s time to return to mother earth” As the dark lord had raised his saber for the final blow, Fien had managed to pull a snow boulder from Ajunta’s back and made him fall down before cutting his opponent into half. With a quick maneuver, Fien slided to the right and jumped by Force to stand up. Now the crystal was lying in next to Fien’s foot. As young apprentice moved his arm to reach the black crystal on snow, a scream took his attention. It was Ajunta with a psychopathic rage in his eyes. “I SAID IT'S MINE!” He launched his saber with power towards Fien then everything happened in a second. As there was only a foot remaining between the fury of the saber and Fien’dur, apprentice has handled the crystal from ground, and everything had turned black...
Fien was now lying on mosit surface of the crystal caves on Dantooine and was still baffled at the encounter he had just had with an ancient sith lord. In one of his hand there was the crystal, and in his another hand there was a pyramid shaped holocron, glowing with a faint inner orange color. Fien made his way out of the caves with his crystals, eager to finally construct a new lightsaber.
Fien arrived back to the landing pad, with his newly found collection of crystals, in search of his master who he presumed was playing a game of pazzak with a salvager to pass time.
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