The Training of Fien'Dur

High Mage Serratus

((We will begin the training OOC. Please fill out this form;
Preferred lightsaber type:
Preferred lightsaber form:
Order you wish to join:
Alchemy or Necromancy:
Greatest personal flaw:))
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If you see dreadlocks and a staff coming towards you very rapidly, you're in trouble.

Fien'Dur

Preferred lightsaber type: Double if multiple enemies, single if only one.
Preferred lightsaber form: Shii Cho
Order you wish to join: Expansionist
Alchemy or Necromancy:
Greatest personal flaw: The want of control.

High Mage Serratus

((Use parentheses (), [] or {} when conversing in an OOC manner. I asked for your preferred type of lightsaber, you have given me two. I asked for your order, you have given me a political party. I asked for your personal choice between alchemy and necromany, you gave me no answer.]

Correct these mistakes immediately so that we may continue with your training.))
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If you see dreadlocks and a staff coming towards you very rapidly, you're in trouble.

Fien'Dur

I don't know what OOC stands for. I don't know the manner in which Alchemy or Necromancy is used. And what are the options for order?

High Mage Serratus

((OOC stands for Out-of-Character. It is the term for speech outside of an RP. As your training will be an RP, you must use OOC speech.

The choices of Order are the stealthy Inquisitorius, the monastic Church of the Dark Side, the mighty Sith Imperial Armed Forces, the elite Royal Guard and the mysterious Order of Sith Mages.

Alchemy is the creation and transformation of things using the Force, Necromancy is the resurrection of things using the Force.

I believe, as the first part of your training, it would be wise to read everything in the Required Reading forum and to read up on the announcements in each forum.))
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Fien'Dur

Okay. I shall do it again and with everything filled out.

Fien'Dur · Last edited by Fien'Dur on Wed Jul 01, 2009 3:28 pm; edited 1 time in total

Preferred lightsaber type: Single blade
Preferred lightsaber form: Shii Cho
Order you wish to join: Stealthy Inquisitorius
Alchemy or Necromancy: Necromancy
Greatest personal flaw:)) Wants to much skill

High Mage Serratus

((Duly noted. Please begin by making a long, detailed RP post describing your feelings and first impressions upon arriving at the Sith Temple on Dxun, where I will be conducting much of your training.))
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Fien'Dur

Fien finally arrived on Dxun for his training. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple. As he was walking towards all he could think was " I can't fail, I can't fail ". Fien was feeling excited to be training with his master for the first time, hoping that one day he could be as skilled as Serratus was. As Fien stepped forth into the temple to see his master Serratus standing there, looking impatient but content. " Sorry about the wait master ". " I was expecting you hours ago " as he turned and walked to the center of the room. " Let's begin your training ".

High Mage Serratus

((I asked for a long, detailed post. That was neither long nor detailed. Try again. And do not presume to control my character.))
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Fien'Dur

{ Do you want any dialog in the post? }

High Mage Serratus

((You may speak if you so choose but do not presume to control how I respond.))
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If you see dreadlocks and a staff coming towards you very rapidly, you're in trouble.

Fien'Dur

Fien arrived for his training on the planet Dxun. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple, and then around looking at the landscape noticing some sparring apprentices. As he was walking towards all he could think was "I can't fail". Fien was excited to be training with his master for the first time, hoping that one day he could be as skilled as Serratus was. As Fien stepped forth into the temple to see his master Serratus doing light saber forms and practicing. Fien stood and watched his master, trying to learn from him as he was practicing. He was in sync with the force with every movement of his body. He sensed Fien's presence as he walked in, and finally made eye contact. Serratus made a head nudging movement telling Fien to come closer. Fien, with an anticipated walk thinking "and it begins",met Serratus's eyes, they were looking through Fien as if he wasn't even there. The training had started then and there.

High Mage Serratus

((Once again, you have presumed to control my character, an action which is actually against the RPing rules of this forum. When I asked for a long post, I did not mean a block of text. Try using spacing. There is no detail to this post either, and very little about your thoughts and feelings. Try again.))
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Fien'Dur

{ You're getting a laugh out of this aren't you? }
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High Mage Serratus

((No, I'm getting frustrated with your inability to follow instructions. Do not comment on my teaching, just do as I say.))
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If you see dreadlocks and a staff coming towards you very rapidly, you're in trouble.

Fien'Dur

Fien arrived for his training on the planet Dxun. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple, and then around looking at the landscape noticing some sparring apprentices. As he was walking towards, a cool rush of wind breezed by and cooled off the apprentice, making him feel invigorated. And all he could think was "I can't fail".

Fien was excited to be training with his master for the first time, hoping that one day he could be as skilled as Serratus was. As Fien stepped forth into the temple to see his master Serratus doing light saber forms and practicing. Fien stood and watched his master, trying to learn from him as he was practicing. He was in sync with the force with every movement of his body.

He sensed Fien's presence as he walked in, and finally made eye contact, a glance that pierced right through Fien."It's as if he knows everything about me with one look". Fien was chilled by the gaze that Serratus gave him and sat down to meditate until his master was ready for him to begin the training.

While in meditation Fien thought about his home world of Iridonia, and how his brother killed his family and nearby villages. "I thought i had killed him", rage flowed through Fien and he then realized how important his training was to him and his revenge.
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High Mage Serratus

((Once again you have controlled my character and initiated your own training. I see I will have to give more specific instructions.

1) All you are to do is arrive at the Sith Temple.
2) You will not see me at all, doing anything.
3) Your entire post must be devoted to nothing but your arrival, your thoughts and feelings upon arriving and entering the Temple.
4) The post must be 500 words at the least.

This time I am also going to mark your post out of 100. For every incorrect use of spelling, grammar, punctuation, capitalisation, syntax and spacing, I am going to deduct one mark. There is a minimum mark you must earn or else you will have to try again. I am not, however, going to tell you what that mark is, nor will I tell you the mark you earn. Try again.))
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Mage Superior Odin

Fien'Dur, as the very first task from me, I want you to write what Serratus asked you here last. I believe he has explained very clearly what you are supposed to do. Once you write this, we will move to real training or a mission. For now I want to test your roleplaying skills. You can edit your last response here, but exclude info about Serratus. What you can do to enlarge the post.
-You can express the weather
-You can express the temple entrance (think about a real life temple and narrate it)
- You can express how you look (body, clothes etc.)
- You can express the nature (trees, grass etc.)
- You can express your gestures

etc.

I just need one post with Serratus' standarts, then we will proceed to another topic.
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Klopf klopf, lass mich rein
Lass mich dein geheimnis sein

Fien'Dur

Fien arrived for his training on the planet Dxun. Fien stepped out of his ship looking ahead at the sith temple, and then around looking at the landscape noticing some sparring apprentices. As he was walking towards, a cool rush of wind breezed by and cooled off the apprentice, making him feel invigorated. And all he could think was "I can't fail".

Fien was excited to be training with his master for the first time. Fien took a moment to observe his surroundings, a tip he learned from his old master when he was a boy. He was taught to be prepared for anything. Although Dxun was a jungle planet and there wasn't much to look at. Fien was determined to channel his force powers and get motivated. So he sat down in a cool, soft patch of grass. He used battle meditation and dark side energy was stirring within him.

After ten minutes of meditating Fien stood and looked up at the clouds, they were turning dark grey and the wind was fierce. A downpour of heavy rain fell before the jungle planet. Fien embraced the ferocious storms energy. Fien threw his hood over his head and began walking to the sith temple expecting his master to be waiting for him to start his training.
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Fien'Dur

( Sorry, i forgot to do this. )

Preferred lightsaber type: Double-Bladed Lightsaber
Preferred lightsaber form: Double-Bladed Lightsaber Combat, Makashi.
Order you wish to join: Stealthy Inquisitorius
Alchemy or Necromancy: Necromancy
Greatest personal flaw: Wants to much power.
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Mage Superior Odin

It was good, no need to test your roleplaying anymore. I believe you can have a duel right now
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Klopf klopf, lass mich rein
Lass mich dein geheimnis sein

Fien'Dur

Thank you master.
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Fien'Dur

Fien was inside his quarters, on the planet Iridonia, meditating upon the force, feeling it all around him. Fien kept thinking about the code of the sith as he did this. Peace is a lie. There is only passion. Through passion, I gain strength. Through strength, I gain power. Through power, I gain victory. Through victory, my chains are broken. The significance of the code had much meaning to Fien and he always followed that code with honor and respect.

Fien had finished meditating in his chamber and walked out the chamber door, and noticed his comlink flashing. Fien picked it up and answered, "Hello?"

Fien suited up in his clothes and grabbed all of his gear. His master, Odin, had given him a mission to pick up the new lightsaber crystal Fien had requested. After Fien and Odin had their duel, he needed to rebuild his lightsaber because Odin had sliced it in half. He had plans to meet up with Odin at a transport ship on Iridonia. Fien waited for the arrival of his master.
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Mage Superior Odin

Fien was now in the very end of his apprentice days. Young Zabrak had already proved himself enough and now it was the time to have his very own saber with a crystal that would belong to him. He was going to make his way through the deep crystal caves while he was going to get challenged by the pure energy of Force.

Odin's personal cruiser, Osiris, was slowly hovering down on a landing pad of Main Academy Hangar, Sith Master had seen his apprentice already waiting for him. Suddenly all the pace going on in the giant hall had been stopped and focused on one ship. As a procedure for incoming Masters, the crew of hangar had positioned for a welcoming next to Osiris' main hatch as well some guards. While Elric stepped out alone, the crowd bowed down simultaneously. "Thank you, dismissed." Elric shouted just before everyone had turned their backs and returned to what they were doing. He slowly approached his apprentice, and put his hand on his shoulder.

"Are you ready?"

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Klopf klopf, lass mich rein
Lass mich dein geheimnis sein